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Mikoto Uchiha
contest : :iconmikotouchihafc:

the idea was before she married :D
kinda like the outcome :3
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First off, I would like to point out how beautiful the colors are and the stunning designs on the kimono are just breath-taking. Plus, the way the artist made the fan motion look as if she's really waving the fan is a wonderful touch to the picture.

In this piece, I can only point out a few flaws within the proportion of the face. The way the lips were placed doesn't so much as match up along with the way the direction she's looking. These kind of face poses are sometimes extremely difficult, but with practice and practice, it becomes easy. Also the head is partially too large...when drawing, it's a good idea to start with the basic shapes. In which case the head would be in the shape of a circle. You can then edit out however the hair design is.

I would also like to point out that the hair is amazing. I've always admired hair that was drawn this way. Overall, the picture is beautiful and really eye catching. Excellent work.
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Just like the other critiquer said, the hair is absolutely amazing!
The ornaments in her hair, however, don't seem to really match the piece. They seem sort of cut and paste. The colours in this are extraordinary though! I absolutely love them!

One thing you have to watch out for is shading. On the girls hair and face, the shading appears to come from the bottom left, but on the clothes and fan it seems to come from the top right.

The background also doesn't seem to match the piece. This may just be my personal opinion, but it looks more like a texture that you cut and paste on without putting any effort into, and it seems to be kind of random. Try making it more of a tangible background, like an actual place she could be at.

Her clothes are absolutely beautiful though! The folds and the pattern are amazing, and the colors are simply stunning! I really do love this piece!

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:iconhollta:
hollta Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2011
good job but the hand more specifically the fingers need shading in between
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:iconvchen79:
vchen79 Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2011
yep :)
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:iconzahratiq:
zahratiq Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2011  Professional Interface Designer
I luv pink
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vchen79 Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2011
:)
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Meowchee Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2011  Professional Artisan Crafter
Nice work! I really like how you did the kimono! The colors are very nice.
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vchen79 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2011
thank you :D
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henryz Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2011
good started. try to look on a reference for a hand positioning, the way hand grip the fan. especially on the right hand. IMHO.
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vchen79 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2011
yep thank you :D
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Ryouhi Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Looks sweat :3
Good Drawing and nice colouring :D
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vchen79 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2011
thanks :)
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Ryouhi Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
you're welcome
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KyokoandKagra Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Hey, just stopping by to tell you that this deviation was moved to our "Featured" folder at :iconanime-explode:
We are honored to have you in oour group!:love:
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vchen79 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011
wow thank you :D
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KyokoandKagra Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Nonsense! How could I not? Your beautiful art speaks for itself XD
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3wyl Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Hmm.. Interesting piece. :nod:

I like how the background complements her dress there in terms of the colours and style so that we really get the impression of the atmosphere and mood... the hair contrasts in a pretty awesome way and the composition isn't too bad either.

I do feel that the proportions and features could do with a bit more work, though. The hands seem to be hanging there. If you think about where the arms are placed, it feels disjointed, if that makes sense? I also feel that you could have drawn the hands a bit better as well, especially with the one on the left side, as that appears to be like a paw, almost...

I feel that you could make the fans a bit more distinct from the background. Perhaps you could have coloured it a different colour or outlined it differently. At the moment, I feel it blends in a bit too much.

The clothes are fantastic, though. I really like the patterns and the intensity there.

The eyes could be better positioned in the face and I feel as if the body/shoulders are a bit too thin as well.

Not bad, all in all! :D
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vchen79 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011
thank you :D
i can't really draw hands , haha
proportions :) still need a lot basic practice :iconplanningplz:
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:icon3wyl:
3wyl Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Just keep practising, I guess. :)
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vchen79 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011
yep :)
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Dreamlonging Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011
Okay, I'm no digital specialist so any critique I give will be coming from a traditional artist.
First off, i love how colorful this is! To my eyes, the blue of her hair clashes with the purple of the background but maybe that's just me.You must have put a lot of work into her kimono because the pattern is beautiful.
The white blur on her fan is not very realistic though, I don't really understand what it comes from.
In order to make your picture more realistic you should remember that if the light source is purple the shadows in her hair and face should be at least partly purple. And since the light source is behind her her face needs a lot more shading from the start.
Otherwise, great job though!
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vchen79 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011
thank you very much , that was a great learning :D
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Dreamlonging Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011
you're very welcome!
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KaerucchiMoon Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
i love the design on her kimono!
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vchen79 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011
hohoho :D
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im-promptu Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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Hi there!
As soon a I saw this piece I was really amazed by the vibrant colours and attention to detail. I love the patterns on her kimono and the fluff on the edges of her fan and on her hair ornaments. The shading is great also. However I feel that the hands and the shape of her face could be fixed up a bit. Hands aren't usually so neatly lined up when they're holding something, try using your own hands as a model when you're drawing, usually people find that quite helpful. Overall, I think you have a very nice piece here! :D
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vchen79 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011
thank you :3
i will train some more on them :D
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im-promptu Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
no problem! :)
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pinballwitch Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011
:iconprojectcomment:

The shades of pink you use here are exquisite. The level of detail, particularly on the hairpiece, is also commendable.

There seems to be a sort of cloud or puff of smoke or something near the front fan--I'm not sure exactly where you were going with this, but to me it looks quite grainy and rather disappointing compared to all the other meticulous detail in the piece. If it were smoother and less grainy, I think it would help this piece tremendously. As it is, it seems out of place and distracting with all the careful detail elsewhere (like the fringe on the end of the other fan! gorgeous!).

As others have said, watch out for your light source. Shading gets particularly funky on the hands (the knuckles and joints are creepily nonexistent, looks like)--I think you darkly shaded too much on the front hand (the division between light and dark is a strange spot), and too little--with a very weird cutoff--on the back hand. In other areas, the problem with shading is more about inconsistency: the light source seems to change, but it shouldn't.

Someone else said that the background seemed out of place; I agree. It is a little jarring and the first thing I noticed when I looked at the piece. A calmer background (not as bright a color, or just a solid/gradient color) would prevent the viewer from focusing first on the background. With so many details in the main body of your work, a simple background would prevent the eye from getting overwhelmed.

The patterns on the fabric are so darn pretty!!

:D Hope this was helpful! Feel free to ask me to clarify anything.
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vchen79 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011
i see , i need to determine the point of interest first then :D
i make the smoke grannyier but it looks like it backfired :)
for the background just done randomly , haha

light source , bg, composition , there's a lot of homework for me :3

thank you very much for the time :)
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FireWario Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
So elegant, graceful, and beautiful! Lovely use of colors
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vchen79 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011
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Hjernedaud Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011
Hi..
I've seen that you already got a lot of comments from :iconprojectcomment:

And I don't have anything else to add.. xD
People already commented on what I wanted to say.
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vchen79 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011
i, see thank you then :D
it will really help to fix me :)
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ruabat Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
First off, I really like the fact that it is very colorful and bright.
It's got a nice color scheme.
The white dots seem like they would be overpowering, but they aren't.

I really like her skin, the detail in her hair and the dress. It all looks great

The fan is the only part that bugs me. It's got a blurred look to it and the left side is an odd green-ish color. I think it would look better if it looked Diffeent from the robe. The fan and robe look to much alike. Change the color in the fan or add a texture to it, maybe paper?
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vchen79 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011
i see i will try it then :D
i make it a little saturated because its a little far from the lightsource but maybe its looks weird ,

need practice more lighting techiques, haha
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Weidi92 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2011
Hello^^!

First thing I thought while looking at this, was "wow, the colours are so strong and beautiful!". They really are pretty, though I think it gets a little to harsh in the upper- right corner(behind her head).

Not wanting to repeat what has already been stated; I really like the hair, but her head looks just a little too large(even if the hair is puffed up). Also, the shading on the left- most fan should be done the same way as the other one.

But there is very much that is very good about this drawing^^. The shading on her clothes, the shades used for shading on her skin, and of course her hair which I have already mentioned.
So keep it up, and good luck in the contest^^!

Best regards *Weidi92, volunteer for :iconprojectcomment:
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vchen79 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2011
thank you very much for taking your time in close look for it :D

i see, will pay more attention to anatomy again then ,

thank you :3
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Weidi92 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2011
My pleasure^^!
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Chaibird Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2011
First off, great job with the kimono--It looks like you really put in a lot of effort to make it. However, it does look a little strange compared to the rest of the image.

I agree with ~Pua-Pua that the fingers do look rather glued. Also, the mouth seems a little far down compared to how short the nose is.

On the whole though, this is a very well drawn piece, with a very strong composition. Keep it up!
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vchen79 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2011
ah i see that now the mouth :D
didn't notice it
how is it look strange ?
i can't seem understand it
can i have some direction?
it will really help my inexperienced
:D

anyways, im really grateful for taking a good look on it :3
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Chaibird Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011
Strange like, the kimono, to me at least, seems a little blurred where the rest of the picture is very crisp. It's just a vague feeling I have though, so I'm sorry I can't really direct you very well. I hope you do well in the contest!
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vchen79 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011
no2 it's okay
it really helps :D

thank you :)
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anapests-and-ink Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I love the sense of movement. And her expression--strong, devious, and yet a little wistful and sad. And yes, her outfit is awesome.
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vchen79 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2011
thank you :D
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Pua-Pua Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2011  Student General Artist
I love the shading style, really brings up the volumes. Also the realistic approach to the hair looks really impressive, there isn't really a lot to critique here.
The only who things that kinda bug me are the clothing pattern (perhaps using a better resolution/less compressed image?) and the fingers, I think the shading should wrap a little more around them so they don't look glued together.
Other than that I'm really impressed bu the overall composition, colors and leven of detail. Amazing work.
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vchen79 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2011
than you very much for the honest comment :3
i really appreciate it and will put it in a good use :D
for the pattern when i use it, it doesnt look weird , but when you say it , i just noticed that thanks :D
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Storyteller2010 Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2011   Photographer
This is beautiful! The background, everything gives it an ethereal effect!
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vchen79 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2011
whoa thank you :3 and welcome to DA :D
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Storyteller2010 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011   Photographer
You are very welcome!! Thank you!! I'm loving DA so far!!
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ConduitProductions Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
holy....i wish i could draw like that >>
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vchen79 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2011
thank you :D
it still wrong in many ways but i keep trying :D
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